帮忙看一下,这句话有没有语法、标点符号,以及用词错误I advocated a new diet revolution - I encouraged Chinese to eat fruit before regular meals, maintain their intake of cereals, eat more vegetables and reduce their consumption o

帮忙看一下,这句话有没有语法、标点符号,以及用词错误I advocated a new diet revolution - I encouraged Chinese to eat fruit before regular meals, maintain their intake of cereals, eat more vegetables and reduce their consumption o
帮忙看一下,这句话有没有语法、标点符号,以及用词错误
I advocated a new diet revolution - I encouraged Chinese to eat fruit before regular meals, maintain their intake of cereals, eat more vegetables and reduce their consumption of meat and oil.
特别想知道是在句子中的“—”有没有用错,可不可以这样写?这段话是算一个句子还是算两个句子?“—”后面的内容仅仅是作为前面“ a new diet revolution ”的一个解释说明吗?和中文用法一样?

帮忙看一下,这句话有没有语法、标点符号,以及用词错误I advocated a new diet revolution - I encouraged Chinese to eat fruit before regular meals, maintain their intake of cereals, eat more vegetables and reduce their consumption o
句子中 — 的用法没错
— 是用来连接连个相同的句子
语法没什么问题,但有时用词不当
例如advocate 和 revolution都太过强烈了,而且这个建议并不是完全”崭新的“
相对而言用现代时态会更有说服力/听起来会更坚定（推销或演讲都是用present tense)
建议：
I strongly recommend a new diet—I encourage Chinese to maintain their intake of whole-wheat products,(to) reduce their consumption of meat and fat products,(to) eat more fruits before regular meals and also (to) eat more vegetables during meals.
原句里的fruit,vegetables 和 meat 都是食物品种,但cereal 和 oil都是食物品种类的一种,所以我统一/广泛化了一下
严格来说句中打括号的 to 是必需的,但那只是对论文的要求
现实生活中可用可不用,因人而异 （但大家一般都不用……）

可以 负责任的说 你句子的没有错误
划线是可以这么用 不过老外不习惯用这个 一般是表现在email地址里的符号
用语法承接前后更好 特别是定语从句
是这个revolution的解释说明 所以很适合用that 从句
可以改成
I advocated a new diet revolution, what i am referring with is tha...

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可以 负责任的说 你句子的没有错误
划线是可以这么用 不过老外不习惯用这个 一般是表现在email地址里的符号
用语法承接前后更好 特别是定语从句
是这个revolution的解释说明 所以很适合用that 从句
可以改成
I advocated a new diet revolution, what i am referring with is that encouraging Chinese to eat fruit before regular meals, maintain their intake of cereals, eat more vegetables and reduce their consumption of meat and oil.

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1、你整篇都是过去时态，没问题吧？什么情况下用的？
2、用advocate不合适，那个是主张某某主义或者为人辩护用的。用recommend就可以了，你是个普通人。
3、凡是revolution都是新的，所以去掉new
4、maintain their intake of换成keep on intaking
5、consumption前面的their去掉，保持前后一致...

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1、你整篇都是过去时态，没问题吧？什么情况下用的？
2、用advocate不合适，那个是主张某某主义或者为人辩护用的。用recommend就可以了，你是个普通人。
3、凡是revolution都是新的，所以去掉new
4、maintain their intake of换成keep on intaking
5、consumption前面的their去掉，保持前后一致
6、oil改成edible oil

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