帮忙改下高三一篇英语作文As far as i'm concerned,it deserves making great efforts to learn English well,which will benefit you a lot ,undoubtedly!It's notes that really counts,which is the best way to review what we have learned.What's mor

帮忙改下高三一篇英语作文As far as i'm concerned,it deserves making great efforts to learn English well,which will benefit you a lot ,undoubtedly!It's notes that really counts,which is the best way to review what we have learned.What's mor
帮忙改下高三一篇英语作文
As far as i'm concerned,it deserves making great efforts to learn English well,which will benefit you a lot ,undoubtedly!
It's notes that really counts,which is the best way to review what we have learned.What's more ,developing abilities is our aim and reading books will help you have a deep insight of society.As we all know,poetry is the reflection of culture,for which reason,it's advisable that you learn some famous articles by heart.In addition ,a good dictionary is your friend,and will keep you accompany.
In a nutshell,your efforts will pay off sooner or later,such being the case,never giving up and we will success in the near future!
ps：这篇作文很伤我自尊心，披卷的老师才给了我15分。其实，我看它很顺眼啊。呜呜
请根据自己过去两年的高中学习经验，结合“记笔记，培养能力，多阅读，多背诵名片，用好词典”等几个方面，给高一新生用英语介绍如何学好英语

帮忙改下高三一篇英语作文As far as i'm concerned,it deserves making great efforts to learn English well,which will benefit you a lot ,undoubtedly!It's notes that really counts,which is the best way to review what we have learned.What's mor
呃 有的地方不知道是笔误还是什么your写成了you 还有your efforts will be paid你没有“be”这个词,如果是笔误,那我只有一点建议,高考的作文最主要是简单,你这个有点过于追求特殊句式了,作文通常在七到九句话结束,不可能每个都用句式的,要顺其自然.
作文 尤其高三的 最主要的一点是抓住中心 而且让中心一目了然 放在显眼的位置；要用明显的分隔 类如 the most important ,then,at last等等 有层次感；再有就是我前面说的 要简洁 例如你这个就可以是“take notes,develop ability,read widely,make better use of the dictionaties”总之,要用最常用的短语,尽量简洁,而复合句多是把好几句放在一起,而不是把一句话说得很长.多看一下满分作文,

我说，你到是把作文拿出来呀

对的

文呢？

1.as far as i concerned
2.your friend
3.你通篇用的是you ,最后的时候用的是we.人称不一样，作文直接降级。
许久没有摸英语了，我估计最大的问题是人称吧

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As far as i'm concerned,it deserves making great efforts to learn English well,which will benefit you a lot ,undoubtedly!
It's notes that really counts,which is the best way to review what we have learned.What's more ,developing abilities is our aim and reading books will help 【us】have a deep insight of society.As we all know,poetry is the reflection of 【a certain】culture,【so】it's advisable that 【we】 learn some famous articles by heart.In addition ,a good dictionary is【our】 friend,and 【should】 keep 【us】 accompany.
In a nutshell,【our】 efforts will pay off sooner or later,such being the case,never giving up and we will 【succeed】 in the near future!
作者对英语的感觉不错，表达也还可以
但是对于一篇作文来讲还要注意下面几点：
1.文章的主题应该在第一句明确，后面的主体应该有层次的去诠释主题，达到写作目的，不能想一句写一句，毫无目的的拼凑；
2.表达方式切忌单一，没必要用那么多的非限制性定语从句，表达方式的多样性是高分作文的标准之一
3.注意细节，人称、数、时态等的一致性
4.注意文章的整体构造，每个句子的完美不等于文章的完美！
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1.As far as I'm concerned
2.Take notes that really counts
3.for this reason
4.and will keep you accompany.---and you should keep it company 要么说keep one’s company 要么说 accompany sb
5.such being the case 这句话让人看不懂。Do as these, never give up and you will succeed in the future